#SixSunday 41 In Her Image

Hello everyone. Christmas is just a few days away so Merry Christmas. Hope you have a good one. I’m continuing with In Her Image and the next black cloud to ruin Doris’ day has just arrived.

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She knew what loss felt like and had no wish to reacquaint herself with those gnawing sensations. Alone was better. It hurt less. There was nothing so wretched as to pretend that your heart wasn’t breaking before a strangers’ gaze.

She scanned the park, looking for another scene to hold her attention. Marcel was still out of sight, but a broad figure strutted along the path in her direction, his belly swinging slightly with each step.

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13 Responses to #SixSunday 41 In Her Image

  1. Jessica Subject December 23, 2012 at 11:54 pm #

    Wonderful description, and great insight into your MC! 🙂




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  2. Karen Michelle Nutt December 24, 2012 at 3:24 am #

    Wonderful and sad. Great descriptions here.




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  3. Sue December 24, 2012 at 4:02 am #

    Better to be alone, nice inner monologue but the man strutting lol toward her sounds unattractive




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  4. Gemma Parkes December 24, 2012 at 5:22 am #

    I love the set up here, understanding her emotion and then wondering who this new character is…




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  5. Taryn Kincaid December 24, 2012 at 5:23 am #

    Good illumination of Doris’ character. And that swinging belly image will stay with me!




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  6. Ceri Hebert December 24, 2012 at 5:31 am #

    That last line was fantastic! I can see it vividly. Very well done six!




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  7. paulinewiles December 24, 2012 at 6:23 am #

    I’m new here but I love the “There was nothing so wretched…” sentence. And I definitely want to know who the broad person with the belly is.




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  8. Elin Gregory December 24, 2012 at 8:28 am #

    Lovely descriptive six.

    Merry Christmas to you and yours. I hope you have a brilliant time.




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  9. Sandra Sookoo December 24, 2012 at 8:51 am #

    I can totally see that man coming toward her. Nice job!




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  10. Stevie Carroll December 25, 2012 at 5:00 am #

    An ominous second paragraph there.




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  11. SE Gilchrist December 26, 2012 at 3:36 pm #

    I cant help feeling trouble is on its way. Love the description of the newcomer!




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  12. Lorraine Paton December 31, 2012 at 3:19 am #

    Uh oh – this new arrival doesn’t sound nice. But, I guess, he is a distraction…




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